Make a substantial revision to earn back 1/3 of a letter grade, revise and resubmit on Bb Writing Projects within a week of receiving your initial grade. To earn the extra credit, resubmit your revised project and, in the â€œAdd Commentsâ€ box on the Bb Writing Project 1 submission form, explain or describe how you have revised your paper from the previous version.
2- Avoid Expletive Constructions–Try not to start sentences with â€œThere is,â€ â€œThere are,â€ or â€œIt is.â€ Before: â€œThere are many factors in the productâ€™s failure.â€ After: â€œMany factors contributed to the productâ€™s failure.â€ Work on fixing expletive constructions.
3- Only quote what is important; quote only what that particular source can say. What does a sourceâ€™s authority offer them the privilege to say?
4- Try to minimize â€œbe verbsâ€ (am, is, are, was, were, be, being, been) in favor of more concrete and descriptive verbs. You may need to reconstruct the sentence in the active voice.
5- Active Voice: When a sentence includes â€œbeâ€ verbs, recast the sentence to omit the verb.
Before: â€œThe meeting was seen by us as a ploy to delay the project.â€
After: â€œWe saw the meeting as a ploy to delay the project.â€
6- Avoid Vague Nouns: Phrases formed around general nouns such as â€œaspect,â€ â€œdegree,â€ and â€œsituationâ€ clutter sentences.
Before: â€œShe is an expert in the area of international relations.â€
After: â€œShe is an expert in international relations.â€
7- More on activism: how your group communicates with their audiences, methods of persuasion, social media analysis, etc.; this assignment is asking for more than just topical information. Help us better understand who is fighting for/against this issue.